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WWW:

·         There is a lot to credit here: many excellent quote clearly some very good research, thoughtful ideas and some moments of critical autonomy. Lots of potential to add two grades to this (only one mark from a c!)

EBI:

·         Written English is concerning: grammar and sentence structure. Look at the errors highlighted on the first page- not good enough for A2 standard.

·         Focus on the question drift in places. You very rarely discuss the second part of your question: impact on audiences. Be careful your textual analysis doesn’t just end up being description – the first Dope scene paragraph is solid but later you just tell me the story.

·         You are missing media theory: where is post-colonial theory? Alvarado? Fanon? Y12 representation theories: Dyer? Medhurst? Perkins? So much to add here!

·         Too much New/digital media with no real link to the question. Cut it to one paragraph and replace it with a strong section on representation theory and black stereotype.

·         You need to learn to introduce quotes. This includes who said/wrote it and the general point the making.

·         Although your quotes are good, you don’t have enough research (Footnotes or Bibliography) to reach the top level. Simple: you need more research!